People in all walks of life work mightily on perfecting
their résumés and other career-building documents and then forget one vital
step. An editor. Preferably an editor versed in all the elements of writing
including grammar, punctuation, storytelling…wait! Storytelling?
Yes. And some other surprises like marketing—and a little knowledge
about psychology won’t hurt either.
The list is long but it can be shortened by thinking
“experience.” A broad range of experience. So, no, your high school English
teacher may not be your best choice. Nor, your mother who “did really well in
English.”
There are a whole lot of tattletale words you shouldn’t use
in your résumé or related documents like biographies, proposals, query letters,
and media kits. All of these documents are designed to convince the reader of
your ability to do the job—your expertise—and to nudge your career (or product)
toward success.
So what are those words? And how do they relate to
storytelling?
Ambitious is one
of the most frequently used tattletale words. It seems like a wasted word
doesn’t it. A couple more that mean little because of overuse or are downright
laughable are highly motivated or responsible. That you are writing this
document is an indication that you are ambitious.
This is where that storytelling thing comes in. You tell a
little story that subtly shows the responsible, ambitious, or highly motivated
aspect of your work habits. Using the age-old writers’ motto, “show, don’t tell,”
will keep your reader from asking—often
with a touch of irony—what makes you ambitious. King Midas was ambitious. Maybe
your reader assumes your father got tired of seeing you playing video games and
you got ambitious only when it looked as if the couch would no longer be a good
place to park yourself.
So what is your story? Tell about the upward movement in
your chosen career or even between careers—how one informs the other and gives
you knowledge and a dimension that no other applicant is likely to have.
Hardworker and go-getter seem as useless in a résumé or
query letter as ambitious. It’s like
tooting your own horn. The person reading it might ask, “Who says?”
Overblown adjectives. Words like exciting and amazing—even
when they describe results or projects—are anathema. They have the same problem
as hardworking above. I call this the
awesome syndrome. They are words that
tempt a reader to scoff. Instead tell a story about the extra effort you put
into a project and the difference it made. Or quote one of the rave reviews you
received from one of your supervisors in a periodic assessment, recommendation,
or endorsement.
Team player has been
a cliché for decades.. Instead choose a group project you’ve worked on and tell
about your contributions. Or just list some of the ways you might have helped
another department or division. And, because human brains have been wired for
stories since we sat around the fires we made in caves, make it into an
anecdote if you can.
Think out-of-the-box is
also a cliché-ridden no-no. It’s storytelling time again
Microsoft Word. I’m
proud that I can produce an entire book using Word from its Contents to its
Index to its Footnotes. I love that I don’t have to spend time learning another
program. But there’s no point in telling people that I’m an expert at Word.
Everyone is. Of course, I can use it prove another point like how well I have
managed to adapt its features to new, advanced project and tell how much time I
saved by doing that rather than learning a new program. I might mention how
much more professional it looked even as I saved that time. And I might mention
that my project got rave reviews.
Some frequently used words like synergy have become a way to insert some humor into a résumé and
that has become as much of a cliché as the overuse of the word. Marco Buscaglia
picked this word out of the hundred (if not thousands) of popular words I call
business-ese. You can avoid them by reviewing your copy and purging anything
that sounds officious including most words with more than three syllables.
Think in terms of relationships, colleagues in other
departments, associates in competing companies, respected academicians, mentors
beyond your teachers. Though a good story can take even that kind of mentorship
out of the humdrum and into an Aha! Moment.
Before you send off your paper, go over it. Find all the
weak verbs—is, be, do—and use your
thesaurus to strengthen them and to make them more accurate.
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Carolyn Howard-Johnson was an instructor for UCLA Extension's world-renown Writers' Program for nearly a decade and edits books of fiction and poetry. She is the author of the HowToDoItFrugally series of books for writers including The Frugal Editor and The Frugal Book Promoter. They are both USA Book News award-winners and both have won several other awards. Her How To Get Great Book Reviews Frugally and Ethically: The ins and outs of using free reviews to build and sustain a writing career.is the newest book in her HowToDoItFrugally series of books for writers. Her The Great First Impression Book Proposal is a booklet that can save anyone writing a proposal time reading tomes because it can be read in 30 minutes flat.
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