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Monday, March 9, 2009

Fourth in a Series on Ellipses by Boyd Sutton




Ellipses are an often neglected subject--one, in fact, that many editors are not thoroughly versed on. Boyd Sutton, editor of Wisconsin Writers' Journal, the official journal for WRWA, published a well-researched piece on ellipses in his 60th anniversary edition this month. He has kindly allowed me to serialize it and run it in this column, a little (digestible) piece at a time. Today he'll talk about using ellipses when you are quoting.



By Boyd Sutton, editor of the Wisconsin Writers' Journal

We all use ellipses in our writing. But getting them right is elusive. Ellipses are those three periods, sometimes spaced (. . .), sometimes not spaced (…), used to indicate that one or more words have been omitted from a quotation or, in dialogue, that a speaker has not brought a remark to completion or that there are awkward pauses in the speaker’s remarks. The problem is not so much in their usage as in their correct presentation—and in correct usage of other punctuation associated with ellipses.

Punctuating Ellipses in Quotations

Punctuation is perhaps the most elusive of all aspects of correct use of ellipses. The rules for punctuating ellipses in dialogue and quotations are different, so refer back to the last article in this series for details on dialogue.

I hope that the examples, combined with an explanation of the theory of what ellipses intend to achieve, will make it easier for all to understand and punctuate them correctly. I would welcome feedback on how to make it clearer.

USING ELLIPES IN QUOTATIONS

In quotations, ellipses are used to indicate that words have been left out because the author considers them irrelevant to his purpose. (We count on the author being honest and not omitting words that would change the quote’s meaning.)

Example: Stark’s article tell us, “Neither alternative ... is likely to solve the fundamental problem.” The author has concluded that the omitted explanation of the alternatives is not relevant, just the fact that the article concludes that neither is likely to work. Note that there is one space before and after the ellipses.

If you omit one or more words from the beginning of a quotation, it is not necessary to use ellipses—unless the document is very formal, such as an academic thesis. In that case, there is no blank space after the opening quote and before the ellipses.

Example: Actual statement being quoted, in context of an author’s writing, with nothing omitted:

In his book on Aloysius Whitman, Jake Jarvis states, “Whitman asserts that there is no need to argue the issue.”

Informal use of ellipses:

In his book on Aloysius Whitman, Jake Jarvis states, “There is no need to argue the issue.”

Formal use of ellipses:
In his book on Aloysius Whitman, Jake Jarvis states, “... there is no need to argue the issue.”

But, if you omit one or more words from the end of a quotation positioned at the end of the hosting sentence, you need to use both a period and ellipses if the quoted matter has the status of a grammatically complete sentence. Do the same if the quoted material requires a question mark or exclamation point. No blank space precedes the period/question mark/exclamation point.

Example: Here’s what it looks like with no words omitted:
Later in his article, Jarvis states, “It’s too late to solve this problem by throwing money at it, even if money were no object.”

Here’s what it looks like with unnecessary words omitted. Note that what’s left is a grammatically complete sentence, fulfilling that requirement for adding the period.
Later in his article, Jarvis states, “It’s too late to solve this problem by throwing money at it ....”

On the other hand, if the quoted matter at the end of a hosting sentence is left grammatically incomplete (that is, a sentence fragment), the hosting sentence must end with ellipses and no concluding punctuation preceding the close quotes.

Example: Jarvis simply ends with, “I see no hope for ...” It’s as though he ran out of steam and just gave up. (Note that a space precedes the ellipses, but there is no space between the concluding dot of the ellipses and the close quotes.)

If you delete material before a comma in a direct quotation, leave a blank space before the ellipses and one blank space after the ellipses and before the comma.

Example: Here’s how it looks with no omissions:
Jarvis quotes Whitman, “After completing this part of the book and taking a couple of weeks off, I brought in a new editor for a fresh perspective.”

Example with omissions: Jarvis quotes Whitman, “After completing this part of the book ... , I brought in a new editor for a fresh perspective.”

If you delete material after a comma in a direct quotation, leave a blank space after the comma and before the ellipses and one blank space after the ellipsis.

Example: Here’s how it looks with no omissions:
“The book was getting too long, despite my best intentions, so I decided to cut entire chapters.”

Example with omissions:“The book was getting too long, ... so I decided to cut entire chapters.”

If you delete one or more entire sentences within quoted material, use a period (or question mark or exclamation point) following the end of the first part of the quoted material, followed by a space, then the ellipses, then another space before the last part of the quoted material.

Example: Here’s how it looks with no omissions:
“I realized that my preparations were taking too long. I’d been at it for several hours. The sun was about to set and I’d lose the ability to detect anyone coming over the distant hill. So I declared the trench I’d dug for protection to be good enough and got out my night vision binoculars to await the inevitable.”

Example with omissions:
“I realized that my preparations were taking too long. ... So I declared the trench I’d dug for protection to be good enough and got out my night vision binoculars to await the inevitable.”

A final note. Don’t use ellipses when you are quoting a single word or short phrase into a hosting sentence. Simply use quotes. Readers will understand that you have extracted material from a longer piece.

Example: Jarvis saw Whitman’s work as “exceptional” and “a creative revolution.”

I suspect that, by now, you are tearing your hair out and declaring ellipses as “too hard,” especially those funky rules about how to punctuate them correctly. Don’t feel alone. I’m with you. As I researched this article, I learned that I have always used ellipses correctly—that is, for the right reasons—but whenever I’ve managed to punctuate them correctly it has been pure luck. And I wasn’t lucky all that often.

A note on sources: As always, my primary source is the Grammar Desk Reference, by Gary Lutz and Diane Stevenson, published by Writer’s Digest Books. I highly recommend it. The Wikipedia reference was also useful. I consulted several other references to see if their rules differed and they did not.
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Boyd Sutton is producer and editor of the Wisconsin Writers’ Journal, a quarterly publication of the Wisconsin Regional Writers Association . His articles, essays, and short stories have appeared in newspapers and magazines. He is a freelance editor and has won many writing awards, including the Jade Ring, Wisconsin’s most prestigious writing award, for his essay, “Owning Your Own Time—Managing Your Retirement.” He may be reached at journal@wrwa.net. This article first appeared in the 2008 winter edition of the Wisconsin Writers’ Journal.



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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Wednesday, March 4, 2009

Second in a Series on Ellipses by Boyd Sutton




Ellipses are an often neglected subject--one, in fact, that many editors are not thoroughly versed on. Boyd Sutton, editor of Wisconsin Writers' Journal, the official journal for WRWA, published a well-researched piece on ellipses in his 60th anniversary edition this month. He has kindly allowed me to serialize it and run it in this colummn, a little (digestible) piece at a time. Today ellipes and dashes and typing ellipes.

By Boyd Sutton, editor of the Wisconsin Writers' Journal

See the first column in this series for infomation on when to use ellipes.

As a Substitute for Dashes

Avoid using ellipses as a substitute for a dash.

Incorrect: He was willing to set aside his anger ... for the moment.

Correct: He was willing to set aside his anger—for the moment.

Typing Ellipses

The Chicago Manual of Style recommends typing ellipses by beginning with a space following the word, then three spaced dots (dot-space-dot-space-dot), then another space before the next word. Thus: “I didn’t mean . . . I mean that I would never have said something like that.” But, according to the Wikipedia entry on ellipses (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ellipsis), Robert Bringhurst (Elements of Typographic Style) argues that a full space between each dot is “another Victorian eccentricity. In most contexts, the Chicago ellipsis is much too wide.” He recommends using flush dots (dot-dot-dot). Thus, “I didn’t mean ... I mean that I would never have said something like that.” (But note that there is still a space before and after the three dots.) In the Wisconsin Writers’ Journal, I will adopt the more modern use—three dots with no intervening spaces ( ... ), but writers should always use the style of the publication to which they are submitting. Always make certain that the beginning and ending spaces and all three dots fit on a single line of text.

Note from Carolyn: Most editors of books choose to use ellipses with the spaces. That is what I recommend in The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success. You'll also informaton on the desired style selections for em dashes and en dashes in that book.
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Boyd Sutton is producer and editor of the Wisconsin Writers’ Journal, a quarterly publication of the Wisconsin Regional Writers Association . His articles, essays, and short stories have appeared in newspapers and magazines. He is a freelance editor and has won many writing awards, including the Jade Ring, Wisconsin’s most prestigious writing award, for his essay, “Owning Your Own Time—Managing Your Retirement.” He may be reached at journal@wrwa.net. This article first appeared in the 2008 winter edition of the Wisconsin Writers’ Journal.

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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Friday, February 27, 2009

First in a Series of Articles on Ellipses by Boyd Sutton




Ellipses are an often neglected subject--one, in fact, that many editors are not thoroughly versed on. Boyd Sutton, editor of Wisconsin Writers' Journal, the official journal for WRWA, published a well-researched piece on ellipses in his 60th anniversary edition this month. He has kindly allowed me to serialize it and run it in this colummn, a little (digestible) piece at a time. I hope you'll follow along.

By Boyd Sutton, editor of the Wisconsin Writers' Journal

We all use ellipses in our writing. But getting them right is elusive. Ellipses are those three periods, sometimes spaced (. . .), sometimes not spaced (…), used to indicate that one or more words have been omitted from a quotation or, in dialogue, that a speaker has not brought a remark to completion or that there are awkward pauses in the speaker’s remarks. The problem is not so much in their usage as in their correct presentation—and in correct usage of other punctuation associated with ellipses.

When to Use Ellipses


One or more words have been omitted from a quotation. Ellipses should be used when the omitted text is irrelevant to the author’s purpose and it does not alter the meaning of the quoted text.
Example: Jones states that, “Neither alternative ... really affects the outcome.” In this case, the author believes that including the omitted alternatives would not add useful information; and, he believes that omitting the alternatives doesn’t change the meaning of the quoted text.

Most style manuals urge not to use ellipses at the beginning or ending of a quotation, except in rare cases.

Incorrect: The bylaws explain under what conditions a member’s seat “... will be considered vacant …”

Correct: The bylaws explain under what conditions a member’s seat “will be considered vacant.”

In dialogue, a speaker has awkward pauses and incomplete utterances. Ellipses should be used when the speaker’s words are halting or incomplete (trailing off without a clear ending).

Example: “I can’t, you know. I ... I just can’t tell her.” Or, “It’s impossible for me to actually believe that she actually ...,” Harry said, close to losing it.

In dialogue, to indicate missing parts of a two-party conversation when only one part is heard. Ellipses can be used to show one side of a telephone conversation, for example.

Example: “Hello. ... Mary, where have you been? ... Oh, no! ... Slow down; slow down. ... Stay right there. I’ll be there in 10 minutes. ... No, don’t call Jack. He’ll freak out. ... No! Just sit tight and wait for me.”


When quoting a poem and eliminating one or more entire lines. This is a rare use, but good to know. When a poem being quoted has not been run in with the text, but has been presented as an extract, the omitted lines are marked by a series of spaced dots (dot-space-dot-space-dot-etc.) equivalent in length to the line immediately above it.

Example: (From The Grammar Desk Reference, page 270) In Diane Stevenson’s poem, Resurrection,” the act of knitting becomes a means of recovering, reclaiming the body of a departed loved one:
Here are the many soft fists of yarn.
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
From this morning’s knot, a back is formed,
And grows, row by row, each stitch and loop of wool.

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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writes will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Saturday, June 14, 2008

A "Secret" Construction That Helps You Vary Sentence Structure and Avoid the Horrible Dangling Participles

This is a continuation of the conversation created by the post a couple of days ago. Just scroll down a bit. (-:


Question: This is a question about dangling participles (and I'm blushing at how guilty I am - but I never knew what they were. ahem!) The reason I do them is because I don't want to start every sentence with 'I' in a query letter or 'he, she, characters name,' in a fiction book - so I use the gerund or dangelly participle to change the sentence structure - Got any tips on how to do that without using the ING, ED, or EN on the end of my words.

Congratulations on being quoted in that book (Dee and Brian Powers' book on promotion) too.

Billie A. Williams, author of The Bread and Breakfast Murders

Answer: Billie, here is one rarely used construction one might use to vary your sentences. Begin your sentence with a "That." I goes something like this. "That Billie Williams didn't know the very boring terms for dangling participles and gerunds doesn't deter her from writing well." You see, the whole "that" clause serves as a subject and there is not an "ing" anywhere.

About that idea that verbs that end in "en" and "ed" might indicate that you have used a dangler and that they should be avoided. Not really. Where would fiction writers (and writer!) be without simple past tense! LOL. Those "ings" are a different story. If you use one, know that it could very well lead you in that dangling participle trap. Doesn't mean that progressive tenses and other uses for "ing" aren't grammatically correct. Just be careful. Double check when you see one. Because they are often associated with danglers, they may give you a clue. We all know those danglers are especially hard to see when they are our own.

BTW, there is a section in The Frugal Editor on dangling participles, gerunds and more. It may shed more light on how to avoid one and use the other less frequently.

PS: This conversation originates two posts down in this blog. Boyd Sutton, editor of the Wisconsin Writers' Journal, weighs in on grammatical terms, some odd uses of prepositions with verbs and more.

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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com.

Wednesday, June 11, 2008

Editor Boyd Sutton, Dangling Participles and the Ewwww or Eiew Factor

You will find a conversation between Boyd Sutton, one of my fellows at Word_Mage @ yahoogroups.com and me. He gave me permission to share with you.

Boyd said:

Yep, I caught the grammar vs. grammatical, Carolyn. Good for you. And thanks
for remembering me.

When you started talking about dangling participles I had two reactions. First, my eyes started glazing over. Grammar terms. Eiew! Embarrassment came next. I couldn't define a dangling participle if it were the $1,000,000 question.

But wait! You noted that there was an entire chapter devoted to it in The Frugal Editor. So I went immediately to TFE and found the chapter on DPs and gerunds. Eiew! Another grammar term. But it was a joy to read. You have the same "eiew" response to such terms and made it painless for me.

Now, I have another "editorial" question for you and the gang. What do you call it when people add an unnecessary word, as in, "He dialed up the girl's number." I see this all the time. In my critique group, I just say, "as opposed to 'dialed down' the girl's number?" and they get the point. It also shows up in "conjured up," "winnowed down," and on and on. What's that called? Grammarians (nope, it's not "grammers"), with all their fancy names and terms, must have a high-falutin term for that.

Boyd Sutton, Editor, the
Wisconsin Writers' Journal, www.wrwa.net

From Carolyn:

Boyd, I call it "colloquial." Or on second thought, maybe "redundant." Ha! But then you already read that I'm not much for all those terms that make us nod off when anything remotely related to grammar comes up.

Notice I didn't say "colloquial usage." I have a strong dislike of words that end with "age." Not just because of my age, either. Like "signage." Seems we already have a perfectly good word for that. It's "signs." Seems we're just trying to sound high falutin' with an extra syllable. But "dialed up" adds a whole new word, not just an extra syllable. So in this case, I'd consider another term for your example. Consider "dumbing down." Ahem.

LOL. You asked.
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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits and consults on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success on Amazon. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com.