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Tuesday, November 24, 2009

Part II Carolyn and Yvonne Perry Talk Editing Books

This is the second part the details from a podcast Yvonne Perry and I made a few months ago. It is part of my effort to actively blog, even while I am on vacation. To see the first part, please scroll down to the November 22 post.

Ff you'd rather hear the podcast in its entirety, find it at: http://yvonneperry.blogspot.com/2007/07/tgif-july-13th-2007.html. Because of the length, you will find this in two blog posts.


The post from November 22 covered:

Titles and headers
Entitlement
Titles
Using all caps
Is this okay or OK?
Number Number
Use of percent symbol
Spaces between sentences
Serial Commas or killers?
Writing for Decades
Hyphenating

This blog will cover

Internet and Web site
To Dash or not to Dash
Away a way
A lot or alot
That that that
Writing Dialog
Writing Numbers
Questions from our Readers
Information on Yvonne's Editing Service

Keep in mind that editing for books tends to be more stringent (and different) than editing other material, like news copy, blogs, etc. These answers are in agreement with The Chicago Manual of Style


Internet and Web site

Internet is a proper noun and the first letter should be capitalized. The debate on whether or not Web should be capitalized is still ongoing. CMOS says it should be written in proper case. It is another name for World Wide Web, which is a proper noun. RE: Web site. When a word is used a lot, its spelling becomes commonly accepted even if it is incorrect. The most common spelling and use of this word is website. However, according to CMOS, it is two words: Web site. As long as you are consistent throughout your book or document, I doubt most people will question either spelling.

Style Sheets

This is not information on grammar. It is a reminder because I know you will save yourself tons of time if you keep a style sheet as you write. Any time you make a choice between two possibilities, both of which are right (like web site or website), make a note and alphabetize it. You'll also end up with a much more professional book to say nothing of ending up with a manuscript that is easier for your editor to tweak.

Oh, yes! Be sure to give you editor the style sheet. It will help her, too. Always a good idea, especially if you're paying her by the hour. Ha!

To Dash or not to Dash

The em dash [—] is defined as one em (letter “m”) in width. The double hyphen will convert to an em dash—if you type two dashes (hyphens) ‐‐ and do not put a space before or after. Or, you may create an em dash in Windows‐based programs by pressing and holding Caps Lock and Alt while typing 0151 on your number key pad. Similar to a parenthetical phrase, the em dash sets apart clauses in a sentence. In other words, if you would normally put something in parenthesis, it could lend itself to em dashes.

The en dash [–] is one en (letter “n”) in width: half the width of an em dash. The en dash is used to indicate a closed range, or a connection between two things of almost any kind: numbers, people, places, etc. For example: June–July 2008. Create an en dash in Windows‐based programs by pressing and holding Caps Lock and Alt while typing 0150 on your number key pad. There should be no space before or after an en dash.

Away/a way

a way: noun
away: adverb

A lot or alot

Allot, a lot, or one word: alot

That that that

Overusing “that” is another area where writers tend to go overboard. If a sentence makes sense without using the word “that, ” by all means, leave it out.

Writing Dialog

When writing dialog, all punctuation goes inside the quotation marks. When a word or phrase is used to set apart text in scare quotes, the first example below is correct; the second is incorrect: Every day we hear that the price of gas has hit an “all time high.” Every day we hear that the price of gas has hit an “all time high."

Writing Numbers

Numbers less than ten should always be spelled out. Some style guides will disagree about higher numbers. Chicago advocates that all numbers under 100 should be spelled out. If in question, always consult a style guide. Be consistent and use the same style guide throughout the document or manuscript.

Carolyn, I would like for you to tell our listeners about your book on editing and where they can get a copy. Also, introduce them to your wonderful newsletter, blog, and Web site.

In this next part of our conversation, Carolyn and I will give answers to the questions sent in by the readers of our blogs where the announcement for this event was posted.

Questions from our Readers

QUESTION FROM MOLLI NICKELL: I'd be interested in opinions on how and when "traditional" publishers will be including digital publishing in their plans, and, how will they promote this low-cost method of making books available in the electronic format.

MOLLI: Also (and yes, this is a second question), I feel writers will want to know more about how traditional publishing houses are opening their own self-publishing divisions, utilizing their editors and designers, but bringing the author aboard to share in some of the pre-publication work?

QUESTION FROM HEATHER SUMMERHAYES CARIOU, Author of Sixtyfive Roses: A Sister's Memoir left a new comment on your post "Opportunity to Get Your Title Mentioned on Podcast...":

I went over my manuscript with a fine tooth comb, then had an English teacher friend check it for grammar, punctuation and typos, then my agent and publisher/Editor went through it, then my copy editor, then I did one more sweep and there were STILL a handful of errors that one reviewer found it necessary to point out. What can be done to avoid this with my next book?

This is especially for Heather, but it may help others as well. I ghostwrote a book for a client last year. After writing it, I edited it twice: once to reduce the 700-page count, and again to get the gremlins out. Then, I had my mom proofread it. The author and another editor proofread it. The author's publicist proofread it. The publisher proofread it, and everyone who gave endorsements proofread it. You would think that the book would be error free, right? Nope. A typo reared its head in the final PDF today! Fortunately, we still have time to fix it before it goes to print, but I wouldn't be surprised if another boo-boo doesn't manifest after we get a copy of the printed book in hand.

As Carolyn said, even professionals make mistakes, and I've seen typos in textbooks produced by the most reputable companies. Most readers won't notice a tiny error, and those who do, may not mention it. It's the big, ugly errors (like dialog punctuated incorrectly) that are repeated over and over in a book that really throw it out of the running as an enjoyable read. I see that a lot with POD and self-published books.


AN ANONYMOUS GUEST on Carolyn’s blog wants to know if we will touch on securing an agent.

Carolyn's Answer: Getting a good agent and/or publisher is very important. One of the big reasons writers must learn to edit well is to secure a publisher or to secure a well-connected agent who will secure a publisher for her! Even if an author prefers to self-publish or use a POD service, doing a great job of producing one's own book goes a long way toward generating sales. A poorly written book is not one that people are going to promote by word-of-mouth to their friends. A reader may not even finish reading the book—let alone recommend that someone else read it. For that very reason, WITS Podcast has criterion that a book must meet before we have the author on our show.


QUESTION FROM BARBARA TECHEL, author of Frankie, the Walk 'N Roll Dog, www.joyfulpaws.com is in the process of writing her second children's book. Her first children's book had a critique group helping with the editing until Barbara felt her manuscript was "good enough" to give to an editor. She no longer has a critique group to run her manuscript by. The book is about half complete now.
Barbara’s question: Is there a good point to bring on an editor? Should I bring one on now for advice or wait till I have the manuscript completed? Or, should I work with an editor during the entire process?

Yvonne’s answer: The more the author can do beforehand, the less it will cost to get the book edited. Therefore, I suggest an author get her book as ready as she can before approaching an editor.

I’m not sure about all editors, but the editors on my teams are all able to help an author with her book at any stage of the manuscript process. We offer different levels of editing depending upon what the book needs when it comes to us. If an author is on a budget and can’t afford the level of editing the book truly needs, we may give suggestions for improvement and have the author do more work before bringing the manuscript back to us. I recently had an author re-write his script into third person rather than first person . It probably took him ten or more hours to do this, but it saved him at least $500, and the book is much improved as he employed the tips I gave him for writing dialog.

We offer developmental, medium, and light editing as well as proofreading of the final manuscript. These services are described in detail at http://writersinthesky.com/editing-services.html, but here are the basics:

Developmental or Substantial Editing is used when an author needs a writing coach to guide her work to the next level. We not only mark errors in the text, we offer specific suggestions for improvement as we assist the author with making changes to strengthen her writing and develop her story to its best potential. A developmental editor may help with all elements of the book including front and back matter, and making sure the text adheres to Chicago Manual of Style guidelines. Additionally, we may instruct the writer on working with styles, and formatting text, margins, headers, footers, and placing graphics or end notes. Since this is all part of the writing process, a fully developed book will still need to be copy edited and proofread before going to a publisher.

Medium Copyediting includes having our editor go through the manuscript and complete the needed changes to include:

• Correcting mechanical, grammar, and usage errors.
• Correcting spelling, punctuation, and grammar.
• Check for proper alignment and spacing of text.
• Consistently format dates, headlines, numbers, and alphabetized, bulleted, and numbered lists.
• Note any biased language or stereotyping. Note awkward transitions, redundancies, and hyperbole (the author may fix this or we can rewrite sections for her if needed).

In a Light Copy Edit, we will mark or note the same things as outlined in the medium copy edit; however, the author is responsible for making all changes.
Book Evaluation $250

One of our editors will read your book or manuscript (up to 70,000 words) and give a written assessment of its commercial potential. A kind but honest opinion of the author's strengths and weaknesses will be given along with tips for improving the overall quality of writing. The evaluation includes an assessment of the manuscript's publishing condition and what it would take to get it ready to submit to an agent or publisher.

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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Sunday, November 22, 2009

Part I: Yvonne Perry of Podcast Fame Shares on Editing Books

While I am on vacation, I asked several of my most brilliant and giving friends in the pubishing industry to share articles with you. This is one from Yvonne Perry of Writers in the Sky Fame. She kindly abridged some our podcast which is still available if you'd rather hear the whole thing. Find it at: http://yvonneperry.blogspot.com/2007/07/tgif-july-13th-2007.html. Because of the length, you will find this in two blog posts. See November 24 for the last portion.

Welcome to Conversation with Editors with Yvonne Perry and Carolyn Howard-Johnson.

I’m Yvonne Perry, the owner of Writers in the Sky Creative Writing Services. Carolyn is an editor and author of The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward To Avoid Humiliation And Ensure Success (How to Do It Frugally).
This audio is for anyone who needs a little help with editing. We’ll take about an hour and discuss some of the more common mistakes we see writers make and tell you how to correct them. Below you will find a list of the topics we cover and you should know the answers are based on Manual of Style (CMOS) published by the University of Chicago Press. It is one of the most respected and trustworthy guidelines for literary works. I will pose a question and have Carolyn comment on each one.

Titles and headers 2
Entitlement 2
Titles 2
Using all caps 2
Is this okay or OK? 2
Number Number 2
Use of percent symbol 2
Spaces between sentences 2
Serial Commas or killers? 2
Writing for Decades 2
Hyphenating 3

Coming on this blog Nov 24

Internet and Web site
To Dash or not to Dash
Away a way 3
A lot or alot 3
That that that 3
Writing Dialog 4
Writing Numbers 4
Questions from our Readers 4

Titles and headers

A very common error in many of the books I edit or proofread occurs in the title, headers, and subheaders. The Chicago Manual of Style 7.127 states: In regular title capitalization, also known as headline style, the first and last words and all nouns, pronouns, adjectives, verbs, adverbs, and subordinating conjunctions (if, because, as, that, etc.) are capitalized. Articles (a, an, the), coordinating conjunctions (and, but, or, for, nor), and prepositions, regardless of length, are lowercase unless they are the first or last word of the title or subtitle.

Entitlement/titled/entitled

A book is not entitled (meaning deserving, allowed, permitted); it is titled (meaning to have a title, label, or name).

Titles

The titles of books, record albums, movies, TV shows, and screenplays should be in italic type. Do not use “quotation” marks. Do not underline these titles unless you are formatting them for a bibliography. However, article titles and poem and song titles do go inside quotation marks.

Using all caps

Unless a word is an acronym, it should not be in ALL CAPS. Use italics for emphasis.
Is this okay?
OK should be spelled out: okay.

Number Number

ISBN is the acronym for International Standard Book Number. To write “ISBN number” is the same as stating International Standard Book Number number. It is redundant to use the word “number” or the pound symbol (#) after ISBN.

Use of percent symbol

Percent symbols (%) should be spelled out “percent” unless used in a chart or table. Numbers followed by a percent should be in numeric form. Example: 91 percent. However, if a percentage is the first word of a sentence in a literary work, it should be spelled out. Example: Ninety‐one percent of the students passed the test.

Spaces between sentences

Use one space (not two) after a period, question mark, colon, or semi‐colon. This is quite the opposite of what we were taught in typing class way back when! It can be a hard habit to break.

Serial Commas or killers?

CMOS 5.57 states, “In a series listing three or more items, the elements are separated by a comma.” For example: The dog, cat, hippo, and cow jumped over the moon.

Writing for Decades

When writing years, do not use an apostrophe. Example: 1960s, not 1960’s unless you want the possessive form of the word. If abbreviated: ’60s is correct; 60’s is incorrect. Notice that the apostrophe [ ’ ] is used as a placeholder for missing the numbers, and not a single close quote mark [ ‘ ] which faces the opposite direction. Strunk & White will disagree.

Hyphenating

Speaking of years, hyphens and numerals are used when you write “the 16‐year‐ old boy.” No hyphen is needed, and the number is spelled out when you write “the boy is sixteen years old.”



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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Friday, November 20, 2009

Excerpts from My Coming Avoiding Homonym Booboos

I thought I'd share this entry from my coming booklet:

Great Little Last-Minute Edits for Writers
or
The Ultimate Frugal Booklet for Avoiding Homonym Booboos Agents and Other Publishing Professionals Hate

aesthetic/esthetic: Dictionaries generally list esthetic as a "variable of aesthetic.” Aesthetic is more closely related to "aesthetics; of beauty; sensitive to art and beauty." When your meaning is more than "having to do with sensation" (Webster's definition of esthetic) use aesthetic instead. Aesthetic relates to the original Greek. Aesthetic is also more commonly used in both the US and Britain. It may also give you extra points in a gatekeeper's subconscious rating system.

all tolled/all told: You and I both heard "told" when we were kids but that's because "told" was a word. When we we were three years old, "tolled" was practically a foreign word. So now we're all grown up, we have to catch up so we can catch that error when we make it. It's "All tolled," meaning "added up." The argument, of course, is "all told" does make some serious sense. It's so easy to make these errors because we don't see some of these terms in writing very often.

I also wanted you to know I'll be on vacation for the next few weeks. Try hard to miss me a bit, OK?

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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.
And please tweet to your followers. We all need a little help with editing. (-:

Tuesday, November 17, 2009

Computer-ese, Jargon and My Coming Booklet

Tech terms drive me crazy. In general. And in particular.

I'll be including a section on the most heinous ones in my new booklet (more to come on this blog!) that lists common editing (and writing) booboos but I thought I'd vent a bit today on one there's little or no help for. Thus I am including it for relief, though I do suggest some casual alternatives in case there is an occasion where we really need to get away from computer-ese.

It's Wi-Fi:

Wi-Fi doesn't say what it means. We've been told it means "wireless fidelity" but the firm that helps brand products created the term and they say it doesn't stand for anything. I want to know why we've adopted a word that doesn't mean anything! David Pogue of the New York Times prefers "wireless hot spot" when he can substitute that term. It might improve some tech instructions if they said, "Find a cozy nook where your computer can connect wirelessly to the Net." For some of us it wouldn't hurt if they got really basic and said, "You can find one at most McDonald's."


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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.
And please tweet to your followers. We all need a little help with editing. (-:

Monday, November 16, 2009

Perfecting Editing Skills, One Book at a Time




This list expands the one the in the appendixes of my
The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success and is from a coming booklet I hope you'll add to your editing library.

Also note the one iffy recommendation among them. So much more for a good argument. (-:


Mortal Syntax: 101 Language Choices That Will Get You Clobbered by the Grammar Snobs--Even If You're Right by June Casagrande, Penguin.

Orwell's essay "Politics and the English Language." Find it on the Web at: http://www.mtholyoke.edu/acad/intrel/orwell46.htm.

The Elements of Style: 50th Anniversary Edition, William Strunk and E.B. White, Longman. Kind of a half-hearted recommendation, here, and I suspect this will surprise you. Really this book is best, for academics or those trying to manage English as a second language. English is no longer as rule oriented or as static as people think it is and this book—though it uses "style" in the title—does not allow for publishing style choices or for creative choices that might be made by writers of fiction. If you should decide to refer to it, do not use your old copy. The grammar and style information in old editions are particularly dated.

The Birds and Bees of Words: A Guide to the Most Common Errors in Usage, Spelling, and Grammar by Mary Embree, Allworth Press.

The Author's Toolkit: A Step-By-Step Guide to Writing a Book by Mary Embree, Seaview Publishing, a Writer's Digest Book Club selection.

Usage and Abusage by Eric Partridge and Janet Whitcut, W. W. Norton & Co.
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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Saturday, November 7, 2009

The Big Editing Headaches

The big editing headaches are rarely the ones we run across all the time. We've been warned about to-too-two since kindergarten and if we make a 2-mistake, it's not because we don't know the rule. It's because we need an editor to see our own errors.

The real headaches are words like adverse/averse. That's because we're rarely warned about them, because we may hear them wrong in our minds or our minds hear what they think they hear. It's also because we are rarely put on the alert about them.

So, adverse/averse: We are not "adverse" to an idea, we are "averse" to it. We are opposed to it.

Even though the two words come from the same root and are similar in meaning, "Adverse" means that something is harmful or has a negative connotation. So we may be "averse" to doing something because it presents "adverse" conditions. "Adverse" describes the condition of something, "averse" is more about how we feel about it.

Trust me, I've seen the very best of editors miss this one. Now you won't!


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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Thursday, November 5, 2009

AFFECTING WORDS: The Dreaded Adverb

This is from a series of small filler articles I once did for the writers' magazine Writers' Journal. Most of those who follow this blog, I suspect, have heard this warning about the danger of adverbs before but a little reminder never hurt. Besides, I just had an e-mail conversation who had heard about the dreaded adverg and assumed it meant never to use them. Adverbs can be handy! They just need to be examined as part of the editing process!

The Dreaded Adverb:

Adverbs are a headache, if only because we love them so much. I use the “find” function in my word processor to seek them out, and carefully examine each one. Oops, one slipped in. I don’t really need “carefully” do I? The word “examine” pretty much tells the story all by itself.

So, before you send anything from a letter to a manuscript to anyone, don’t just do a spell and grammar-check. Extend it to an adverb check. This is what how you use this tool to best advantage:

1. The adverb is an opportunity for a metaphor or simile that fosters an image in the mind of the reader. “Carefully?” Ask yourself “Carefully as what?” Your metaphor might bring beauty or humor to your work. Instead of carefully your subject might be doing an action “like a bloodhound sniffing out a trespassing mutt” (well, it’s my attempt at humor) or “like a rainbow hummingbird checking one the fuchsia, one blossom at a time.”

2. The adverb might be misplaced. “I only write nonfiction on Mondays.” Is that what you mean? Try “I write nonfiction only on Mondays,” or “I write only nonfiction on Mondays.” One has to be closer to your intended meaning than the others.

3. If the awful “ly” word isn’t necessary. Just delete it.

Keep in mind that not all adverbs end in “ly.” You need to be able to spell to make the spell-checker useful; you need to know your grammar for the grammar-check to do its work; ditto for this adverb check. It’s an only an aid. If you need help with adverbs, you might want to sign up for daily posts from grammar teacher, Mr. Johansen. Find him at: dg3@dailygrammar.com. And you'll find the list of adverbs that don't end in "ly" in The Frugal Editor, along with lots of other practical editing ideas.


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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Sunday, October 25, 2009

My Dangling Modifier Collection Is Growing!

Online friend and author Sylvia K. Hamilton sent me some more dangling modifiers, especially funny ones.

They are not all dangline modifiers per se, but they are all good examples of how easily we can get into trouble. It will be good practice to dissect each and then rewrite them so they say what they mean.

Sylvia (AKA Pee Wee) says, "Carolyn, while looking for writers' jokes I came across these. I don't know how good they are but I picked out a few that I liked best. Anyway...I got a kick out of them."

Newspaper Headlines of 1998

Two Sisters Reunited After 18 Years in Checkout Line.
Kids Make Nutritious Snacks
Local High School Dropouts Cut in Half
Drunks Get Nine Months in Violin Case
Would-be Women Priests Appeal to Pope

In a future post I'll try to remember to tell you the story of my cutline (the message that goes under pictures in newspapers) when I was working as a staff writer at the Salt Lake Tribune. It was similar to #2 above. Stay tuned by subscribing to this blog in the window provided on the left.

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Sylvia K. Hamilton is the author of The Kahills of Willow Walk and its squel For the Love of Willow Walk. Find them at http://willow-walk.webs.com
E-mail: peewee2234488@yahoo.com

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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Quotation Marks, Pictures and the Beginning of a Rant



My daughter writes, "I know incorrectly used quotation marks are a pet peeve of yours. Better look at this:
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2009/10/22/7-awesome-examples-of-unn_n_330321.html?slidenumber=zubE9QcPQnA%3D "

I loved it. All in pictures. Having said that, it didn't really cover those quotation marks so many use around slang or colloquialisms when they don't need to. Hey! We "know" those words! See the quotations around "know?" Don't need them there, either!

Oh, fear my daughter may have gotten me on a roll here. The start of a rant! Quick, click on the link for the pictures before I get started. (-:



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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.

Saturday, October 24, 2009

Dangling-Modifier-Editing Queen Contributes Dangling Modifiers


Mindy Philips Lawrence (http://www.freewebs.com/mplcreative) sent me the link to an article on dangling modifiers. Here's an example of a dangler from this article. I like it because it is immediately obvious. We all know, though, that most are far more sneaky.

Clenching his teeth on a cigarette, the baby cried as the evil man snatched him from his crib.

You'll really want to read the entire post. (-: Not for a laugh but for solid advice.
http://beaumonthardy.com/blog/?tag=misplaced-modifier

Mindy also sent this link from Purdue University that includes danglers and remedies for each plus a nice discussion:

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/597/01/

And she sent these examples: She is the queen editor-of-dangling-modifiers queen! You'll see she differentiates between dangling modifiers and misplaced modifiers. I really see no reason for doing that, though. This is all about editing, not about memorizing grammar terms.

1 -- While driving down the road, a tree hit his car.
2 -- Having been thrown in the air, the dog caught the stick.
3 -- Walking down the street, the trees were beautiful.
4 -- Running for the bus, my book fell in the mud.
5 -- Upon entering the doctor's office, a skeleton caught my attention.

The sentences above are dangling modifiers. Below are samples of misplaced modifiers:

1 -- Covered in wildflowers, Aardvark pondered the hillside's beauty. (The hillside should be covered with flowers, not the aardvark).
2 -- I had to take down the shutters painting the house yesterday. (The shutters are painting the house?)
3 -- A book sat on the table which he had read. (He read the table?)
4 -- Fred handed his paper to his teacher that was late.(Was the teacher late or the paper?)
5 -- The professor posted the notes for the students covered in class. (Were the students covered in class of the notes?)

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Carolyn Howard-Johnson edits, consults and speaks on issues of publishing. Find her The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success at http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0978515870. Learn more about her other authors' aids at www.howtodoitfrugally.com, where writers will find lists and other helps on the Resources for Writers page. She blogs on all things publishing (not just editing!) at her Sharing with Writers blog.